Term+1+Writing

__**Tuesday 5th April 2011**__

 **Why People should come to the Bay Of Plenty.**

__**WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty.**__


 * Success Criteria**
 * My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion**
 * I will state and restate my opinion**
 * I use a range of language resources and punctuation**
 * My paragraphs follow the S E E structure**

Do you want an amazing experience? Do you want to have the time of your life? Then you must come to the wonderful Bay of Plenty New Zealand! The Bay of Plenty has so much to offer you! There are things to do here that you have never dreamed of doing. I think the Bay of Plenty is a great place to just relax and have fun.

Experience the awesome water adventure park Waimarino. They have many cool activities like going on the kayak and mat slide, the Tarzan swing, medium diving board and the little diving board, go around in a kayak, the adventure playground, the spa, trampoline, The BLOB and much much more! There is so much other places to like the Redwoods in Rotorua. Here you can have fun orienteering in the woods. Another must go place is Te Puia in Rotorua because you can learn all about the maori culture you can even look at a marae and experience the awesome mud pools. They are not pools to swim in but they are cute little bubbling blobs of mud that have steam coming up from them. The Bay of Plenty has an active volcano called White Island that you can go on tour boats to. You can go onto the island when you go on the tour boats. Mount Maunganui in Tauranga is a huge tourist attraction. It is a dormant volcano that you can go around it or you can go up it. There are sheep on it. The volcanoes real name is Mauo. Come to our awesome hot pools there is a great one in Tauranga next to Mount Maunganui called the Mount Hot Pools they are salt water pools.

Another thing thats great about the Bay Of Plenty is you can learn all about our Maori culture. You can go onto a Marae which is a Maori place where they have meetings and sing songs. When you come to a Marae you will first be welcomed by the elder woman of that Marae. She will do a speech that sounds like a song that is called the karanga in Maori. Next you will sit down in the sheltered seats provided. Then you hear someone from that Marae say a speech in Maori and then the all the people from that Marae will sing a waiata, a song in Maori. Next you will have someone from your side to say a speech then you will sing a waiata in Maori. Then you will do a Hongi which is a traditional Maori kiss that you will have to do before you are part of that Marae. Once you have done your Hongi you will go into the wharekai to have a drink and something to eat. When you have done all of that you will be part of that Marae forever. I recommend you do this because it is a great way to experience Maori culture.

The Bay of Plenty has great accommodations just waiting for you. There is nice swimming pools, spa’s, a place to eat a yummy breakfast and big rooms to comfort you. Some places in the world don’t even have spa’s and swimming pools so if you want the best accommodations then make sure you come to the B.O.P and do not stop anywhere else!!!! The B.O.P loves tourists from other countries, so if you are someone who is wondering where to go for your next family holiday you MUST come to the B.O.P!!!!

So I hope that you will come to the B.O.P because I think it is the most amazing place in the world. Please take every thing that I have stated into consideration because I reckon it will be the most amazing trip that you will have ever done!

Excellent rhetorical questions and imperatives used in your introduction Abbey. You needed to state your three reasons in your introduction also though. Good connecting your paragraphs. You get your tense mixed up during your argument - you need to watch this. You need to restate your ideas in your conclusion. Good body of your argument, particularly in paragraph 1 and 2 they are very detailed and contain examples. Overall a good piece of persuasive writing with strong imperatives used, but things to work on also. Miss Crone :)